Do you like it or not?

[Xavior]

Answer:

[Book Master]

I didnt think it was perfect because a lot ofthe grammer usage, but i thought it was a good story line, etc on where it was leading to.

[Xavior]

I had no idea what i was doing it kind of like a star wars thing.

[Jack]

I don't seem to be able to view your story.

[ozran]

Ok, im posting the story so you can read it.

Prologue: The beginning

I lived on an undiscovered planet, full of wars between the people who wantedpowerand the ones who wanted peace so we divided and began the largest war in the galaxy.

Many years passed and many died, including my Father who I had never seen. He was killed by a disease that ate him from the inside out. My mother kept our camp hidden and secure; she kept us safe. As a young child, the old wise men taught us to harness our powers. We learned to use the energy within ourselves to destroy, and even change our form to become anything from energy to stone.

When I was 12 I learned new forms and new powers. I learned to levitate myself and other objects in the air form. I started to get stronger then my fellow warriors.

My mother eventually died of the same disease as my father. I tried to save her but could not: it killed her almost instantly. I started to rebel against my masters and taught my self how to control the disease. I fought in the wars in secret and used the disease to kill all in my way. I truly became the strongest warrior I knew.

My people were powerful and strong willed and were hard to kill, but knowing I had more power than any of them, it gave me pleasure to see them dead at my feet.

This was only the beginning.

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I am now 24, we have won the war. I still want more power, I need more power. We do have the technology to leave this planet, but the wise men do not want outsiders to find us here. I have gained a new power, I can drain the power from others and get stronger. I plan to leave this world and destroy it, But not alone I will take the most loyal with me, I will do this at dawn.

"We will attack now, we can only kill this planet when it is empty" I said to My Companions "Jekk, you will attack Giron camp, Visas, you will Attack Sion camp, Baodur, you will attack Marr camp, I will attack The others, Go now Attack!"

"YES SIR!" They all said and they went to war, I went to all the camps and city by city the planet was now empty we gathered on my Modified Basilisk and destroyed the planet was now more, and they left to another planet and found that there were wars going on in the galaxy Between the Templars and the Yarks one seeking peace and one power.
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We went to a planet that was controlled by the Yark, they taught us new fighting styles. I have made a sword that can change in to Energy, it can cut through anything.
The yarks called that place a temple they had extreme fighting styles they were good but not the best.

A story by Xavior.


(I can do this forever and not make sense at all so i'll stop here)

[ChaosX]

I liked it. : )

[Xavior]

Sorry about that jack I forgot to do that. : )